Merge lp:~paulbrianstewart/ubuntu/oneiric/sauerbraten/858631-Spelling-Error-Fix into lp:ubuntu/oneiric/sauerbraten

[Paul Stewart]

* Added commas after 'networked', 'fast-paced', and '3D'.
* Deleted the 'a' before 'some'
* Deleted the word 'rather'.

* Added commas after 'networked', 'fast-paced', and '3D'.
* Deleted the 'a' before 'some'
* Deleted the word 'rather'.

[Martin Pitt (pitti)]

Thanks Paul! It is not worth introducing a delta to Debian for this minor issue, and Oneiric is currently in string freeze anyway (package descriptions are translated, too).

It seems you accidentally removed the line breaks, lines in the control files must not exceed 79 characters. Also, I'm not a native speaker, but adding all the commas there looks strange to me. Perhaps a native speaker can review that.

I suggest that you forward this as a Debian bug, so that it can be fixed there and trickle back down into Ubuntu in the next cycle? The Debian Games team might also have some native English speakers.

Thanks!

review: Needs Fixing

[Paul Stewart (paulbrianstewart)]

> Thanks Paul! It is not worth introducing a delta to Debian for this minor
> issue, and Oneiric is currently in string freeze anyway (package descriptions
> are translated, too).
>
> It seems you accidentally removed the line breaks, lines in the control files
> must not exceed 79 characters. Also, I'm not a native speaker, but adding all
> the commas there looks strange to me. Perhaps a native speaker can review
> that.
>
> I suggest that you forward this as a Debian bug, so that it can be fixed there
> and trickle back down into Ubuntu in the next cycle? The Debian Games team
> might also have some native English speakers.
>
> Thanks!

Ok, thanks Martin,

I'll have another look and forward it as well. I'll get my wife to check the grammar and so on as she's an English Literature teacher. I should have asked her before I sent it :)
Have a great day.
Thanks
Paul

Unmerged revisions

17. By Paul Stewart on 2011-09-25

* Added commas after 'networked', 'fast-paced', and '3D'.
* Deleted the 'a' before 'some'
* Deleted the word 'rather'.

=== modified file 'debian/control'
--- debian/control	2011-06-03 19:03:03 +0000
+++ debian/control	2011-09-25 04:07:11 +0000
@@ -19,8 +19,7 @@
 Depends: ${misc:Depends}, ${shlibs:Depends}, sauerbraten-data (>= ${sauerbraten-data-ver})
 Recommends: sauerbraten-wake6
 Description: 3D first-person game engine
- Sauerbraten is a networked fast-paced 3D first-person shooter game. It supports
- rather modern graphic effects and a some nice graphic details.
+ Sauerbraten is a networked, fast-paced, 3D, first-person shooter game. It supports modern graphic effects and some nice graphic details.
  .
  The game client also works as the map editor. It is even possible to create 
  and/or edit a map together with other people over a network connection.
@@ -35,8 +34,7 @@
 Architecture: any
 Depends: ${misc:Depends}, sauerbraten (= ${binary:Version})
 Description: Debug symbols for the Sauerbraten game engine
- Sauerbraten is a networked fast-paced 3D first-person shooter game. It supports
- rather modern graphic effects and a some nice graphic details.
+ Sauerbraten is a networked, fast-paced, 3D, first-person shooter game. It supports modern graphic effects and some nice graphic details.
  .
  The game client also works as the map editor. It is even possible to create 
  and/or edit a map together with other people over a network connection.
@@ -50,8 +48,7 @@
 Depends: ${misc:Depends}, ${shlibs:Depends}
 Suggests: sauerbraten
 Description: Standalone server for the Sauerbraten game
- Sauerbraten is a networked fast-paced 3D first-person shooter game. It supports
- rather modern graphic effects and a some nice graphic details.
+ Sauerbraten is a networked, fast-paced, 3D, first-person shooter game. It supports modern graphic effects and some nice graphic details.
  .
  The game client also works as the map editor. It is even possible to create 
  and/or edit a map together with other people over a network connection.